crow_daw

She hadn't been quite the same,
since her mother died.
She was stuck by herself,
unable to cross to the other side.

All she wanted in the world,
was for certain people to talk to her.
She didn't know what kind of people they were,
she just knew they were popular.

She was in, they promised, if she did one task.
A smile curled at her lips,
Just cross the catwalk under the bridge,
but it was icy.....she slipped.

To no one's surprise,
they didn't follow her.
They just turned and ran,
and let the river swallow her.

She washed up downstream.
and through the cold December sleet,
She could make out a dark figure,
standing at her feet.

He lifted her up off the ground,
and carried her into the night.
Yet even though it was very late,
they were walking towards a light.

"Who are you," she said,
as she parted her hair so he could see her.
"We don't have names," he said,
"and we don't have wings either."

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J.R.V.A.

You left me wanting more
Thank you for sharing

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And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart

crow_daw

im sure you deduced this already, but its supposed to kinda leave you hanging. and your welcome.

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"We each have a star, all we have to do is find it. Once you do, everyone who sees it will be blinded." - Earl Simmons

J.R.V.A.

Yes, Thats what I meant. It worked very well, I enjoyed it.

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And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart

Akuma7g

Excellent!

*Nikki*

That was excellent!!! I loved it!!! Please please post more!

JStrider

that was really good...

reminds me of what it was like when i first moved to california and would have done anything to been accepted by the groups of people i saw...

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guypunkr

Crow, you should think of making a collection of these (at least for us in the forum).

...Unless you've already done it...

starlite

I like the ending and how it leaves you wondering exactly what it is even though you already know. . . thank you

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chavos

very good ending....even if i still can't quite figure it for sure.

H12

That is a great one, I must say. Good job, crow-daw.

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fallen_angel

Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece with us. . . and thank you double because you helped me think of an ending for something I have been having troubles with.

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Eowyn_Vala

Wow! Excellent work, and may I say the ending is wonderful. It just stops but in a good way!

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DG: And, how am I doing?
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punkgrl1984

I really like this especially the ending!

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