Tilted Forum Project Discussion Community  

Go Back   Tilted Forum Project Discussion Community > Creativity > Tilted Literature


 
 
LinkBack Thread Tools
Old 11-13-2003, 11:21 PM   #241 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Minx's Avatar
 
Location: Up yonder
This is very good, as usual! I love the last four lines in particular, it always seems like I can relate so well to your words.
Thanks for sharing.
__________________
You've been a naughty boy....go to my room!
Minx is offline  
Old 11-15-2003, 07:27 AM   #242 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
Thank you Minx
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 11-16-2003, 07:45 PM   #243 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
Blasted out the smokin barrell
A bullet runnin from the gun
Movin fast as greased lighting
Hit the wall and then I'm done
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 11-20-2003, 07:38 AM   #244 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
Disarm hurts I pulled a muscle
Damned if I can find a cure
Legs a wobbling when I walk
Heart is broken minds a blur
Lucid I are in a memory
Day seems cloudy when I talk
When the one thats broke is mended
Pockets full of nothing more
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 11-22-2003, 05:58 PM   #245 (permalink)
TFPer formaly known as Chauncey
 
Esen's Avatar
 
Location: North East
That last one is quite sureal, and I loved it
__________________
~Esen
What is everyone doing in my room?
Esen is offline  
Old 11-24-2003, 08:58 AM   #246 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Minx's Avatar
 
Location: Up yonder
I really like that last one. You are very talented!
__________________
You've been a naughty boy....go to my room!
Minx is offline  
Old 11-24-2003, 09:50 PM   #247 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
Thanks guys, your comments mean a lot to me
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 11-24-2003, 10:17 PM   #248 (permalink)
Psycho
 
Location: Ouuuterrrr Spaaaaacccceeee
The Burial of the Dead

April is the kindest month. Mixing
rainwater with winter grass, browned
by the forgotten snow and cold. There
is warmth in the water now, and dust
is no longer charging fear into the old dead sockets
left by ice displacement.
A skull in ground, and not a care left in my mind.
And not a care left in my mind.

The lake was shimmering, sure. Also,
the breeze cooled my overwarm skin, but
the flashes of heat from your eye never quite left
the impression you had hoped.
The following winter’s blizzard chilled
every last bit of you from me.
Hope springs eternal, they say.

I never had hoped for a miracle.
I wasn’t dissappointed.
RoboBlaster is offline  
Old 11-26-2003, 12:36 PM   #249 (permalink)
Insane
 
Location: Where You Live.
thanks for sharing
__________________
No Win No Fee
vonstalhein is offline  
Old 11-26-2003, 12:37 PM   #250 (permalink)
Insane
 
Location: Where You Live.
Nice
__________________
No Win No Fee
vonstalhein is offline  
Old 11-26-2003, 01:53 PM   #251 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
Thanks von
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 12-02-2003, 07:56 AM   #252 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
The fog rolls in
I see but I am blind
I hear a muffled cry
I feel numb
The sun trys to hide
The cold wraps around me
The wind whispers my name
The nightmare continues
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 12-07-2003, 02:56 PM   #253 (permalink)
Tilted
 
Location: Dingden, DE / Centennial, CO
Re: The Burial of the Dead

Quote:
Originally posted by RoboBlaster
April is the kindest month.
A bit opposite of "Wasteland", eh?
__________________
Waiting... to be born again

Wanting... the saddest kind of pain
Waiting for the day when I will crawl away
Stillborn is offline  
Old 12-13-2003, 07:13 AM   #254 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
A smile is born, from deep inside
It brews and warms my chest
It flows up from my crinkled toes
And runs along my arms
It climbs upon it's shoulder perch,
and runs toward my face
It hits me smack dab in the middle
Tis then I show my teeth
I thank you all for giving me
A Happy Birthday wish
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 12-15-2003, 05:06 PM   #255 (permalink)
Naughty Just Right
 
Angel's Avatar
 
Location: Euphoria
It has been a while since I have visited lit and your thread. Please forgive my lack of response to your absolutely wonderful work. You make me PROUD dear sweet friend of mine. Thank you for sharing so much of you here and IRL. You are a true gem and a gift to all who get the pleasure of having you as part of their life.
BTW: The Burial of the Dead....WOW! I can't begin to express how that made me feel. Very impressive indeed. Keep it up!
__________________


In the depth of winter, I finally learned that there was within me an invincible summer.
~Albert Camus
Angel is offline  
Old 12-15-2003, 09:02 PM   #256 (permalink)
Psycho
 
Location: Ouuuterrrr Spaaaaacccceeee
Stillborn... good catch. I used that line as a sort of a springboard for my poem. And thanks for your kind words, Angel.
RoboBlaster is offline  
Old 12-15-2003, 09:05 PM   #257 (permalink)
Psycho
 
Location: Ouuuterrrr Spaaaaacccceeee
Tree of a Wasted Life

Trees grow so slow that you don’t even notice
when they finally stop reaching upwards
and rest, content, waiting for the fall.
Waiting for their offspring to take root
they pray silently. All the while
getting only fatter.
RoboBlaster is offline  
Old 12-16-2003, 05:06 PM   #258 (permalink)
Naughty Just Right
 
Angel's Avatar
 
Location: Euphoria
Quote:
Originally posted by RoboBlaster
Stillborn... good catch. I used that line as a sort of a springboard for my poem. And thanks for your kind words, Angel.
You are welcome RoboBlaster. However, I must be honest and say that I hadn't realized it was someone else's work, I thought it was J.R.V.A.'s.
BUT, it is really good, enough so that I would recommend you start your own thread where people can read your stuff and reply directly to you. Your work certainly is worth it's own place.
__________________


In the depth of winter, I finally learned that there was within me an invincible summer.
~Albert Camus
Angel is offline  
Old 12-16-2003, 10:02 PM   #259 (permalink)
Psycho
 
Location: Ouuuterrrr Spaaaaacccceeee
My own thread, eh? Perhaps I shall do just that. Maybe I'll start with BOTD
RoboBlaster is offline  
Old 12-18-2003, 07:59 AM   #260 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
I see red, and it soothes me
The color of money is greed
Blue is a day where the sun shines
White seems to free me of need
A yellow rose bud makes me queasy
A black heart was burned the last time
Pink panties get me excited
And purple boots help me to climb
A rainbow is filled with all colors
I look at one and sit and smile
Emotions remembered once doormant
These colors make my life worthwile
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 12-18-2003, 03:11 PM   #261 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Minx's Avatar
 
Location: Up yonder
Nice work, as usual! I very much like your line "The color of money is greed".
Well done!
__________________
You've been a naughty boy....go to my room!
Minx is offline  
Old 12-29-2003, 10:59 PM   #262 (permalink)
Naughty Just Right
 
Angel's Avatar
 
Location: Euphoria
*bump*

Your work is worthy of viewing often...so I'm bumping it up top.
Can't be having you fall off to the second page!

Thanks for sharing your work!
__________________


In the depth of winter, I finally learned that there was within me an invincible summer.
~Albert Camus
Angel is offline  
Old 12-30-2003, 07:18 AM   #263 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
Thanks to both of you. It is very awe inspiring to get praise from two such as you. Sorry I havent ben around for a while, With the holidays and the new house, I am trying to squeeze 26 hours into a day. Will be here more soon
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 12-30-2003, 03:03 PM   #264 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
If you looked closely, you could see the corner of his mouth
It was the only indication there was a part of him missing
It wasn't like a man who had lost his leg, or arm, It was something different
The smile that once covered his face, was still there, but one corner would not turn up
Try as he may, he couldn't make it do it
It may have been the years of toil, or maybe innocence lost,
or the childhood, maybe none of those
Somehow it seemed it would always be there, he was known for it
When people would speak of him, they would comment on it
He did a good job of being he
A piece of him was missing
If you looked close, you could see
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 12-30-2003, 03:13 PM   #265 (permalink)
Naughty Just Right
 
Angel's Avatar
 
Location: Euphoria
With eyes and heart wide open...I can see the missing piece.
Your words took my breath away. You have the most amazing gift my friend. You inspire me.
Thank you for you.
__________________


In the depth of winter, I finally learned that there was within me an invincible summer.
~Albert Camus
Angel is offline  
Old 12-31-2003, 07:54 AM   #266 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Minx's Avatar
 
Location: Up yonder
I very much like this last one.
You do have a wonderful talent and I find I relate to your words so easily.
I look forward to the next one!
__________________
You've been a naughty boy....go to my room!
Minx is offline  
Old 01-09-2004, 07:16 AM   #267 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
THANNKS MINX
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 01-09-2004, 07:22 AM   #268 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
You wake up and your still there

What a bitch you think, as you
look down at the mirror

Today was supposed to be the day,
you wonder what went worng

You fumble for your feelers

Another day, another way,
Deja vu might work today

Tingling toes release the pain,
and soothe away the heat

The smell you taste will tell the tale,
and rush along your haste,
Succeding in the failed attempt
to see and hear your fate
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 01-13-2004, 02:29 AM   #269 (permalink)
Naughty Just Right
 
Angel's Avatar
 
Location: Euphoria
The tangled world of addiction.
You captured it well my friend.
This says so much between the lines.
Great work as always.
~Angel~
__________________


In the depth of winter, I finally learned that there was within me an invincible summer.
~Albert Camus
Angel is offline  
Old 01-21-2004, 06:46 AM   #270 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
Thanks for the kind words
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 01-21-2004, 06:46 AM   #271 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
Your sentiment of sediment is rudimentary
Extolling loquacity you sporadically loom in me
Proposing propisititions predisposes perplexity,
propititious as an army ant, sailing out to sea.
Lopped upon the looking glass, it seems to be the key
The incidence of occurence, as sumptuous as it seems,
adversely tipples to the tune, of fond past memories
To filch away another day,bequeaths a quality,
of prophecy when harvestmen, crawl beneath the trees
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 01-26-2004, 04:44 PM   #272 (permalink)
Naughty Just Right
 
Angel's Avatar
 
Location: Euphoria
After disecting and digesting your work, more than once, it amazes me that you can write something that at first boggles my mind with it's complexity and once understood and felt, boggles my mind with awe and my heart with wonder. You impress me.
__________________


In the depth of winter, I finally learned that there was within me an invincible summer.
~Albert Camus
Angel is offline  
Old 02-07-2004, 06:01 AM   #273 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
Thanks all, I really enjoy reading your responses, almost as much as I enjoy writing
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 02-07-2004, 06:29 AM   #274 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
My spine starts to shiver when I think of you
remembering days and times that werent blue
A walk in the park brought me from the dead
a twinkle inside from the words that you said
A heart noer pure encompassing time
a heart that I wished was somehow still mine
My heart somehow beats, though cracked to the core
repairing its self, and longing for more
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 02-10-2004, 09:18 AM   #275 (permalink)
Insane
 
Location: Where You Live.
'My heart somehow beats, though cracked to the core
repairing its self, and longing for more'

I like this very ryhtmic style, and the imagery is nice an emo'.

'The incidence of occurence, as sumptuous as it seems,
adversely tipples to the tune, of fond past memories'

I like this especially, but the rest of that piece i thought was a little contrived. I love the word 'sumptious' too, and the theme of differing perception (that i presume is intentionally) lent to the piece by 'as it seems' is evocative. Nice!
__________________
No Win No Fee
vonstalhein is offline  
Old 02-11-2004, 06:05 PM   #276 (permalink)
Naughty Just Right
 
Angel's Avatar
 
Location: Euphoria
Oh my, you have always had what it takes to tug on my heart strings!
Nice work my sweet friend.
__________________


In the depth of winter, I finally learned that there was within me an invincible summer.
~Albert Camus
Angel is offline  
Old 02-26-2004, 07:57 AM   #277 (permalink)
Junkie
 
Location: Utah
We go on

The look of knowing in our eyes
The words twixt two are no surprise

We hold within our trembling hands
A world of dreams and pending plans

We wonder why the days roll on
to soon we know they will be gone

"If only" plagues our weary souls
we ponder times of different roles

On we go today again,
a smile perhaps we'll somehow feign

A step to take a thousand flights
we look toward our guiding light
__________________
And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart
J.R.V.A. is offline  
Old 02-26-2004, 02:54 PM   #278 (permalink)
Jesus Freak
 
Location: Following the light...
I enjoy how you utalize rhyming paterns. Your poems always flow so smoothly.
__________________
"People say I'm strange, does that make me a stranger?"
ForgottenKnight is offline  
Old 02-26-2004, 04:30 PM   #279 (permalink)
Naughty Just Right
 
Angel's Avatar
 
Location: Euphoria
Quote:
Originally posted by J.R.V.A.
"If only" plagues our weary souls
we ponder times of different roles
This entire poem reaches far into my heart and soul but this specific line has such a deep rooted connection that I continue to read it again and again.

Thank you my dear sweet friend, for all you have been and continue to be to me and my life. Thank you for being a constant, never failing me.

And by the way...it's about time you put something new here!
__________________


In the depth of winter, I finally learned that there was within me an invincible summer.
~Albert Camus
Angel is offline  
Old 03-08-2004, 11:19 PM   #280 (permalink)
King Knave
 
QuasiMojo's Avatar
 
Location: Lancaster
S~
you have grown so much since I first read you.

keep on
__________________
AzAbOv ZoBeLoE
QuasiMojo is offline  
 

Tags
pleasure, poems

Thread Tools

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Trackbacks are On
Pingbacks are On
Refbacks are On



All times are GMT -8. The time now is 11:27 PM.

Tilted Forum Project

Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.7
Copyright ©2000 - 2024, vBulletin Solutions, Inc.
Search Engine Optimization by vBSEO 3.6.0 PL2
© 2002-2012 Tilted Forum Project

1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 26 27 28 29 30 31 32 33 34 35 36 37 38 39 40 41 42 43 44 45 46 47 48 49 50 51 52 53 54 55 56 57 58 59 60 61 62 63 64 65 66 67 68 69 70 71 72 73 74 75 76 77 78 79 80 81 82 83 84 85 86 87 88 89 90 91 92 93 94 95 96 97 98 99 100 101 102 103 104 105 106 107 108 109 110 111 112 113 114 115 116 117 118 119 120 121 122 123 124 125 126 127 128 129 130 131 132 133 134 135 136 137 138 139 140 141 142 143 144 145 146 147 148 149 150 151 152 153 154 155 156 157 158 159 160 161 162 163 164 165 166 167 168 169 170 171 172 173 174 175 176 177 178 179 180 181 182 183 184 185 186 187 188 189 190 191 192 193 194 195 196 197 198 199 200 201 202 203 204 205 206 207 208 209 210 211 212 213 214 215 216 217 218 219 220 221 222 223 224 225 226 227 228 229 230 231 232 233 234 235 236 237 238 239 240 241 242 243 244 245 246 247 248 249 250 251 252 253 254 255 256 257 258 259 260 261 262 263 264 265 266 267 268 269 270 271 272 273 274 275 276 277 278 279 280 281 282 283 284 285 286 287 288 289 290 291 292 293 294 295 296 297 298 299 300 301 302 303 304 305 306 307 308 309 310 311 312 313 314 315 316 317 318 319 320 321 322 323 324 325 326 327 328 329 330 331 332 333 334 335 336 337 338 339 340 341 342 343 344 345 346 347 348 349 350 351 352 353 354 355 356 357 358 359 360