KameTheMachine

a little practise for an comic
imagine a stand up comic saying this


All lot of people my age seem to be getting a lot of peircings. They have tongues peirced, noses peirced, and even lips peirced. I dont know why but getting my lip peirced just sounds like a horrible afternoon. Its like getting a vaccination in the mouth. My friend asked my why I wouldnt get a peircing and I told him "I got way to many holes to take care of as it is". Every couple of days I find one I forgot I already had. My girlfriend told me peircings are a way to decorate and draw attention to certain body parts. I told her I can put and party noise maker your my ass and I am sure that will turn a head or two.

just a first try let me know what ya think

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CoachAlan

I think that would be a good bit for a standup. However, "I told her I can put and party noise maker your my ass" is giberrish. Giberrish in the punchline is bad.

Let me know what the actual punchline is and I'll give you a better asessment.

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Shpoop

i think he meant "i told her i can put a party noise maker on my ass"

KameTheMachine

yeah your write I shouldnt type drunk

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