Slippery Rock by Night
 

We are starting up a V:tM LARP here on campus. It fell to me to make the membership cards. What do you guys think?

here is the back

i guess it works for what it's for, i'd drop one of the 2 identical skulls

ok... here's my 2 cents... for whatever it's worth...

i agree with gallopingwanker about losing the duplicate skull.
overall the front side is too cluttered. needs more white space, ie more breathing room.

the back side, personally i think the top text looks better left justified rather than centered.
the "valid til" looks odd sitting centered, while the other 2 lines are left justified. the 3 blank lines should end at the same spot (or so i think so).

overall, many of your font sizes are larger than they need to be.
the focus of the card is obviously the name of your organization. it should stand out more than anything else on the card.

so here's a quickie mock up of my thoughts.
i'm not quite in love with my placement of the sword, but since it's not <i>my</i> card i'm not going to spend any more time on this to make it perfect.

i chose to make a black background with white text because to me that says "night" more than black text on a white bg.

ps. your choice of fonts work well for this.

and i am not saying what you've done is awful. i'm just trying to suggest a few ways that could improve it.

i hang out on a few boards with a bunch of professional designers, so over the past 3 yrs i've listened to them & hopefully i've learned a few things correctly.
i still have very very much more yet to learn!!

Great advice! Thanks!

Nice card, sorry to be a touch off topic, but
is it a cam sanctioned game?

I can ask, that's not a detail of which I am aware.

No, we are not sanctioned by the official Camarilla fanclub. We are poor college students ;)

Nice work, Bernadette - couldn't agree more.

I'm English. What's a LARP???!!

Live Action Role Playing game.




http://free.inkfrog.com/pix/newbie123/Geeks.jpg

You could also spell Till correctly. Even as a contraction of until, it's till.

bernadette great job... just thought id add a little to that... i could have just told u... but im bored... just added fangs.

id print this on a textured card... but thats just me.

Looks.....er.....fun.

I wouldn't fancy my chances with that girl and her plunger on a stick, and that guy with the paddling pool looks pretty dangerous.

Thanks for the explanation. Good luck with the design!

Why does everyone always choose the pictures that make us look like dorks? We're really not.

Heheh. No bopper weapons in WoD, thank goodness. If I wanted to smack somebody around I'd take up heavy weapons in the SCA, get some real armor, and beat people with large rattan impliments.

Sorry man, that was really unfair.

Let me try again.

http://gamma.nic.fi/~huba2/kuvat/larp.jpg

ROFL... try.. again....

Er, well. What am I getting into here? Suddenly I feel I'm in a parallel universe or something. Nothing seems to make sense like it used to in my old life.

Hello? Hello?