Well I'm not much of a critic, as I enjoy most poetry as I read it to get something out of it, not to find something wrong with it. I really like this idea of this thread, and I would like to post a bit of my stuff to get some criticism from others. As for this piece, as the way you write always make me feel, the only thing I found wrong with it was it reminded me of a girl I once knew.....And a place I once was that wasn't so great...but I guess that really was'nt something wrong, is'nt that what good poetry is supposed to do?
Anyway, I think ngdawg's suggestion was good. I like how she( Sorry
)took what I thought was good, and seemed to make it a bit better. Not weak to me either.