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K-Wise · 10-23-2004, 04:19 AM

Hmm I dunno if this is perfect but I'm definitely proud of it. Hope you like it.

edit: Here is an audio file of me reading it aloud to give an example of what it might be like in spoken word. I of course could do better but this is just an example. Just copy and paste the link for it to play

Water Color Woman
http://www.angelfire.com/music6/asta11/Water_Color_Woman.mp3

<center><b>Water Color Woman</b></center>

<i>Water color woman starts to fade when she’s crying.....

Water color woman starts to fade when she’s crying
but the underlying pigment of her roots is cemented
in the foundation of her soul forbidding her to let go when she’s tempted.
Growing paler and paler of a painting while she’s eagerly awaiting
the armor of a fresh coat of good man to lay his impression down upon her.
She’s indecisive as to which color she’d wish to charm her thus her
woes are turned to weeping.
You shouldn’t fret lets not forget that the most appealing colors
don’t appear as such until they’ve dried completely.
And as complimentary colors can blend so sweetly also
others can be decieving. Be sure to envelop in the colors
that develop and seem to weave thee. You must ignore the banners
of pure banter that only gather to mislead thee and instead heed your
head to the love that is shown discreetly.
Not until then will you truely indeed be free. So it’s time to enforce the answers onto the canvas of which you need be
before you’ve grown too pale for my teary eyes to see ye.
And until then my arm will remain forever reaching.
Oh Water Color Woman I can’t determine why it is you won’t beseech me......</i>

It may change but I'm not sure I can make it any better than it is without making it too long. The flow of it is what concerned me but maybe I'm just too much of a perfectionist and it's all in my head. Thank you very much for reading...a reply would mean a great deal to me.

Asta!!

10-23-2004, 04:19 AM	#1 (permalink)
K-Wise It's All About The Ass!! Location: In a pool of mayonnaise!!	Water Color Woman Hmm I dunno if this is perfect but I'm definitely proud of it. Hope you like it. edit: Here is an audio file of me reading it aloud to give an example of what it might be like in spoken word. I of course could do better but this is just an example. Just copy and paste the link for it to play Water Color Woman http://www.angelfire.com/music6/asta11/Water_Color_Woman.mp3 <center><b>Water Color Woman</b></center> <i>Water color woman starts to fade when she’s crying..... Water color woman starts to fade when she’s crying but the underlying pigment of her roots is cemented in the foundation of her soul forbidding her to let go when she’s tempted. Growing paler and paler of a painting while she’s eagerly awaiting the armor of a fresh coat of good man to lay his impression down upon her. She’s indecisive as to which color she’d wish to charm her thus her woes are turned to weeping. You shouldn’t fret lets not forget that the most appealing colors don’t appear as such until they’ve dried completely. And as complimentary colors can blend so sweetly also others can be decieving. Be sure to envelop in the colors that develop and seem to weave thee. You must ignore the banners of pure banter that only gather to mislead thee and instead heed your head to the love that is shown discreetly. Not until then will you truely indeed be free. So it’s time to enforce the answers onto the canvas of which you need be before you’ve grown too pale for my teary eyes to see ye. And until then my arm will remain forever reaching. Oh Water Color Woman I can’t determine why it is you won’t beseech me......</i> It may change but I'm not sure I can make it any better than it is without making it too long. The flow of it is what concerned me but maybe I'm just too much of a perfectionist and it's all in my head. Thank you very much for reading...a reply would mean a great deal to me. Asta!! __________________ "I love music and it's my parents fault (closing statement)." - Me..quoting myself...from when I said that...On TFP..thats here...Tilted Forum Project *It ain't goodbye, it's see ya later! I'll miss you guys!* - Asta!! Last edited by K-Wise; 01-17-2005 at 05:39 PM..