Open Your Mind
 

Open your mind and die
Hateful, mightless wrath
Open your eyes and fly
Go the sightless path

The time of God is near
Existential Man
The lightning rod of fear
Quintessential Man

Although the meat will put many off....well structured and meaningful.

I appreciate the comment, though, could you expound on what your first comment means? I'm not sure I'm understanding your point.

I think s/he means the religious based subject matter. I agree with the comment (If thats what it means) as i personally find anything related to God hard to stomach, but i loved 'Open your mind and die' Very Evocative!

Accurate

Much the way this piece would put many off with its content.....

Closed soul breeding a dead mind
Open only on Sunday
Accepting only those of a kind
Take your failing God and bleed with it

Destruction a follower of your path
Damnation based on love
I have no fear of your lords’ wrath
It has not the power to give you sight

All that I am can feel your hate
Yet fail to understand
I’ll pray to your God it’s not too late
To shed such light as a numb mind can take

Closed mind seeding this dead soul
Redirect your faith
If only your heart you gave control
To see there is no false creator, there is only truth

There is nothing wrong with the poem....the comment was on the content of the thoughts, not the work itself, perhaps I will refrain from emotional critique, and stick to structure.