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tecoyah · 11-20-2003, 03:17 PM

Entrenched desire breaks a sweat
Heated by poisoned ego
Gifted by the Gods to please
Burdened by loves demanding hold
Take the flower in practiced hands
Lap up the petals with buds of taste
Fertile soil beneath such charm
Inexperienced blossom grown from seed
Hunger bleeds from this open rose
Desire the sun which feeds
Spread open these red lips of aroma
Inhaling the depths of you fragrance
Salty, lush bitterness

ForgottenKnight · 11-21-2003, 01:07 AM

"Desire the sun which feeds" - Good line!
"Gifted by the Gods to please" - I like this line too!

Very good poem!

Esen · 11-21-2003, 03:00 AM

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Originally posted by tecoyah

Hunger bleeds from this open rose

great poem,
Incredible line,
I was just floored when I read that, Hunger bleeds from this open rose, man that is amazing

J.R.V.A. · 11-24-2003, 09:27 PM

I agree, this is very good, thanks

torgone · 11-26-2003, 08:03 PM

This is an excellent multi-layered poem.
Very touching.
Good words.

11-20-2003, 03:17 PM	#1 (permalink)
tecoyah Illusionary	fertile bitterness Entrenched desire breaks a sweat Heated by poisoned ego Gifted by the Gods to please Burdened by loves demanding hold Take the flower in practiced hands Lap up the petals with buds of taste Fertile soil beneath such charm Inexperienced blossom grown from seed Hunger bleeds from this open rose Desire the sun which feeds Spread open these red lips of aroma Inhaling the depths of you fragrance Salty, lush bitterness __________________ Holding onto anger is like grasping a hot coal with the intent of throwing it at someone else; you are the one who gets burned. - Buddha

11-21-2003, 01:07 AM	#2 (permalink)
ForgottenKnight Jesus Freak Location: Following the light...	"Desire the sun which feeds" - Good line! "Gifted by the Gods to please" - I like this line too! Very good poem! __________________ "People say I'm strange, does that make me a stranger?"

11-24-2003, 09:27 PM	#4 (permalink)
J.R.V.A. Junkie Location: Utah	I agree, this is very good, thanks __________________ And as she plays, her sweet song of laughter floats through the air and warms my heart

11-26-2003, 08:03 PM	#5 (permalink)
torgone What's beyond psycho? Location: Still out there	This is an excellent multi-layered poem. Very touching. Good words. __________________ "Outside of a dog, a book is man's best friend. Inside of a dog it's too dark to read." Groucho Marx