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Memnoch · 04-10-2004, 03:04 PM

I am so resigned
It's opened up again
This void, this gaping hole inside
And I lose myself again

I'm lost and unfound
Lost in this abyss
Inside of my head
I'm crawling back to this

Always back to this
I can never leave
I'm running to the edge
But I could not believe

This sanity is so unreal
Cuts into me, but I don't feel
Always asking questions, like
Why am I infatuated with myself

Everyday I spend alive
Seems that I just live to die
Try to break the chains but they
Only hold me tighter

So am I to accept this hate
Pouring me into a bottle
Shake me up and drink me down
Get high on me and fucking drown

What the fuck is going on
Existence has gone on too long
Dreaming someone else's dream
Sleep to wake and fucking scream

Feels like everything is wrong
And you fucking knew it all along
I had died, but I woke up today
Extinction is my revelry.

CheeseButtons · 04-10-2004, 09:48 PM

I like it.

Memnoch · 04-10-2004, 10:30 PM

I appreciate the sentiment. Anything in particular that you liked? Or disliked, for that matter. Constructive criticism is appreciated.

CS733t · 04-11-2004, 04:15 AM

I guess it sorta reminded me of some of my brief work...

i'm not a big fan of explitives in poems, it shows emotion but I think it also cheapens it.

Memnoch · 04-11-2004, 02:18 PM

Most people don't appreciate expletives in poems, but what they don't realize is that Shakespeare himself used, what was considered back then, crude language in his poetry, as well. I feel like if it's adding effect to the poem, and in some cases, if it helps the poem flow better, it's all good.

Thanks for the input.

04-10-2004, 03:04 PM	#1 (permalink)
Memnoch Insane Location: Land of milk and honey - Wisconsin	Prison Cell I am so resigned It's opened up again This void, this gaping hole inside And I lose myself again I'm lost and unfound Lost in this abyss Inside of my head I'm crawling back to this Always back to this I can never leave I'm running to the edge But I could not believe This sanity is so unreal Cuts into me, but I don't feel Always asking questions, like Why am I infatuated with myself Everyday I spend alive Seems that I just live to die Try to break the chains but they Only hold me tighter So am I to accept this hate Pouring me into a bottle Shake me up and drink me down Get high on me and fucking drown What the fuck is going on Existence has gone on too long Dreaming someone else's dream Sleep to wake and fucking scream Feels like everything is wrong And you fucking knew it all along I had died, but I woke up today Extinction is my revelry. __________________ Doing my best not to end up like Kathleen Chang.

04-10-2004, 09:48 PM	#2 (permalink)
CheeseButtons Crazy Location: 1000 miles from nowhere	I like it. __________________ Sorrow is better than laughter, because a sad face is good for the heart. -Ecclesiastes 7:3

04-10-2004, 10:30 PM	#3 (permalink)
Memnoch Insane Location: Land of milk and honey - Wisconsin	I appreciate the sentiment. Anything in particular that you liked? Or disliked, for that matter. Constructive criticism is appreciated. __________________ Doing my best not to end up like Kathleen Chang.

04-11-2004, 04:15 AM	#4 (permalink)
CS733t Crazy	I guess it sorta reminded me of some of my brief work... i'm not a big fan of explitives in poems, it shows emotion but I think it also cheapens it. __________________ So tired now of paying my dues I start out strong but then I always lose It's half the distance before you leave me behind It's such a waste of time

04-11-2004, 02:18 PM	#5 (permalink)
Memnoch Insane Location: Land of milk and honey - Wisconsin	Most people don't appreciate expletives in poems, but what they don't realize is that Shakespeare himself used, what was considered back then, crude language in his poetry, as well. I feel like if it's adding effect to the poem, and in some cases, if it helps the poem flow better, it's all good. Thanks for the input. __________________ Doing my best not to end up like Kathleen Chang.