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Metallica_Band · 09-14-2003, 07:18 PM

Hey there...I just finished an essay...I was just wondering if there was anything else I could do to it that would make it better or if anyone could find any more gramatical errors that I have missed...well here's my essay...it is supposed to be on Memphis's Best Kept Secrets...that's the name of the assignment.....can anyone figure out a good title for this essay??? I can't figure one out...I'm usually good at doing that too...well here it is:

Quote:

When planning a trip, keep in mind that the city of Memphis has a lot to offer. Currently Memphis has become a fast growing community. It contains many diverse individuals from all types of backgrounds. People would have to visit the city in order to get the full effect of what it has to offer. Many of the best kept secrets of Memphis involve entertainment, tourism, sports, museums, and several different celebrities that originated from the Memphis area such as B.B. King, W.C. Handy, Elvis Presley, Jerry Lee Lewis, and Sybil Shepard. Memphis offers many different types of entertainment for the whole family to enjoy. It boasts two professional sports teams, world famous barbecue restaurants, diverse museums, botanical gardens, tours of lovely old Victorian houses, and Beale Street. In addition, do not forget as a backdrop for all these wonderful activities, you have the “father of all waters” – the mighty Mississippi River.

In 2001, newspaper headlines read “Memphis Goes To The Hoop And Scores”. That heralded the arrival of the Grizzlies to Memphis. Our own major-league basketball team had finally come to town! Mid-southerners were happy to have an NBA team right in their own backyard. The Grizzlies games are presently being played in the Pyramid; while a new arena to be known as the FedEx Forum is being constructed. The corner of Third and Union, downtown Memphis, was littered with adult bookstores, warehouses, and parking lots. Today it is one of the city’s sports icons – Auto Zone Park. The park is the home of the St. Louis Cardinals’ farm team – the Memphis Red Birds. The Red Birds celebrated six years of Triple-A baseball in Memphis in 2003.

For barbecue, there is no better place than Memphis’s Rendezvous or Corkey’s restaurants. People, celebrities included, come from all over the world to eat in these famous eateries. Both restaurants have become so famous for their pork and sauce that you can order it on-line or by phone. You can also have the food sent to you via FedEx anywhere in the world! During “Memphis in May”, one of the events is a “barbecueholic’s” dream! For three days, there is a barbecue cook-off contest and for the price of admission you can make a “pig” of yourself and eat all the barbecue you can hold.

Southern belles sipping mint Juleps on plantation porches immediately come to mind when we think of southern homes. Victorian homes are not usually associated with the mid-south, but Memphis has eighteen of them. Located in downtown Memphis, they make up some twenty-five blocks and range from Neoclassical to Gothic Revival in style. They have been restored to their appearance on the days when “cotton was king”. Most are privately owned, but the Mallory-Neely House and the Woodruff-Fontaine Hose are open to the public.

In addition to the better-known tourist destinations in Memphis, such as Elvis Presley’s Graceland and the Civil Rights Museum, there are many lesser-known museums as well. There is the Brooks Art Museum, the W.C. Handy Museum, and the National Ornamental Metal Museum. The Brooks Museum is the oldest fine arts museum in the state of Tennessee. It opened in 1916 and has been expanded three times culminating in 1989. Located in the heart of town, the Brooks Museum is a dynamic cultural complex. It includes twenty-nine galleries, art classrooms, a print study room with over forty-five hundred works of art on paper, a research library with over five thousand volumes, and an auditorium. The facilities also include the Museum Store, the Holly Court Garden, and a grand terrace that overlooks the greens and trees of the Memphis’ Overton Park.

The National Ornamental Metal Museum is the only museum in the U.S. that is dedicated to the preserving of the art and craftsmanship of metal-working. Exhibitions range from jewelry and hollowware in precious metals to architectural wrought iron. It’s collection includes 19th century iron furniture, fences, kitchen utensils, a New Orleans-style cornstalk cast-iron fence, and a diorama complete with Victorian blacksmith’s tools. Overlooking the Mississippi River is a working blacksmith shop. Also featured is an outdoor sculpture garden – all right on the Mississippi River bluffs.

The beauty of nature abounds in the middle of the city! This can be believed when you take a visit to the Memphis Botanic Garden located in the Audubon Park. Eighty-eight acres of carefully tended parkland features trees, shrubs, flowers, and working trails, as well as a scenic Japanese Garden surrounding a peaceful lake. The Rose Garden features more than four thousand plants. Special springtime treats include the azalea and dogwood trails, while the perennial and herb collections are also seasonal favorites.

The W.C. Handy House Museum was once the home to William Christopher Handy. The man is referred to as the father of the blues. Located on Beale Street, at this site, Handy composed “Memphis Blues” and “St. Louis Blues”, among others. Handy lived in this house during his Memphis years, though it was located elsewhere. The building was later moved to Beale Street. The house is filled with photographs, memorabilia and some of the original sheet music written by the man who popularized blues.

Beale Street is still the musical heart of Memphis. It is the best place for fans to hear live music, with bars such as B.B. King’s Blues Club. Beale Street has been playing the blues for more than half a century. Historically the centre for black music and culture in the city, it is worth visiting just for its atmosphere. It is known as the birthplace of the blues.

The more one gets to know about Memphis, the more there is to them. Everyone knows about FedEx and Graceland. The Civil Rights Museum as a tribute to Martin Luther King is world renown. However, the local treasures of the less well-known museums, barbecue, sports teams, and historical dwellings make Memphis a great place to live or visit.

I also need another sentence in the conclusion...my dad was gonna help me out on that but he fell asleep...

...if someone could figure out another one for that then that'll be great too...THANX
C'YA ?:-D

meff · 09-14-2003, 08:19 PM

I thought there's a bunch of programs that do grammer/spelling checking?

Getting people to read your stuff to proofread it is kinda, uhm.. I dunno. You get the point?

JadziaDax · 09-14-2003, 08:22 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by meff
I thought there's a bunch of programs that do grammer/spelling checking?

Getting people to read your stuff to proofread it is kinda, uhm.. I dunno. You get the point?

Hey, that's what I was thinking

Fremen · 09-14-2003, 08:27 PM

I'll help you out on one thing.
Sybil Shepard should be spelled Cybill Shepherd.

Tirian · 09-15-2003, 01:20 PM

From the last paragraph ...

"The more one gets to know about Memphis, the more there is to them."

...the more there is to who ?? this may be an unidentified pronoun.

I hope that helps.

Mephisto2 · 09-15-2003, 11:07 PM

OK, there's a bunch of errors in there. I'm not criticising you, but simply stating a fact. For starters, there are TWO spaces after a period. You won't be able to see that clearly in the corrected version below.

*START*START*START*START*START*

When planning a trip to Memphis, keep in mind that the city has a lot to offer. Currently Memphis has become a fast growing community. It contains many diverse individuals from all types of backgrounds. People would have to visit the city in order to get the full effect of what it has to offer.

Code:

The preceding sentence has a conditional clause that seems inappropriate.  Replace would have to with need to or should visit.

Many of the best kept secrets of Memphis involve entertainment, tourism, sports, museums

Code:

Full stop here.

Additionally, there have been several different celebrities that originated from the Memphis area such as B.B. King, W.C. Handy, Jerry Lee Lewis, Sybil Shepard and of course its most famous son, Elvis Presley. Memphis offers many different types of entertainment for the whole family to enjoy. It boasts two professional sports teams, world famous barbecue restaurants, several museums, botanical gardens, tours of lovely old Victorian houses and Beale Street.

Code:

Replaced "diverse" with "many" and removed an inappropriate comma towards the end of the sentence

In addition, do not forget as a backdrop for all these wonderful activities, you have the ?father of all waters? ? the mighty Mississippi River.

In 2001, newspaper headlines read ?Memphis Goes To The Hoop And Scores?. That heralded the arrival of the Grizzlies to Memphis. Our own major-league basketball team had finally come to town! Mid-southerners were happy to have an NBA team right in their own backyard. The Grizzlies games are presently being played in the Pyramid; while a new arena to be known as the FedEx Forum is being constructed. Previously, the corner of Third and Union, downtown Memphis, was littered with adult bookstores, warehouses, and parking lots. Today it is one of the city?s sports icons ? Auto Zone Park. The park is the home of the St. Louis Cardinals? farm team ? the Memphis Red Birds. The Red Birds celebrated six years of Triple-A baseball in Memphis in 2003.

For barbecue there is no better place than Memphis?s Rendezvous or Corkey?s restaurants.

Code:

Removed an inappropriate comma.

People, including many celebrities, come from all over the world to eat in these famous eateries.

Code:

Celebrities are automatically people, so the the sentence above sounded unusual, hence my suggested change

Both restaurants have become so famous for their pork and sauce that you can order it on-line or by phone. You can also have the food sent to you via FedEx anywhere in the world! During ?Memphis in May?, one of the events is a ?barbecueholic?s? dream! For three days there is a barbecue cook-off contest and for the price of admission you can make a ?pig? of yourself and eat all you can stomach.

Code:

Removed an inappropriate comma.  Revised wording slightly.

Southern belles sipping mint Juleps on plantation porches immediately come to mind when we think of southern homes. Victorian homes are not usually associated with the mid-south, but Memphis has eighteen of them.

Code:

In this context, shouldn't "mid-south" be considered a proper noun?  IE, "mid-South".  Not certain of this as I am not American.

Located in downtown Memphis, they make up some twenty-five blocks and range from Neoclassical to Gothic Revival in style. These houses have been restored to their former glory, back in the days when ?cotton was king?. Most are privately owned, but the Mallory-Neely House and the Woodruff-Fontaine Hose are open to the public.

In addition to the better-known tourist destinations in Memphis, such as Elvis Presley?s Graceland and the Civil Rights Museum, there are also many lesser-known museums. These include the Brooks Art Museum, the W.C. Handy Museum, and the National Ornamental Metal Museum. The Brooks Museum is the oldest fine arts museum in the state of Tennessee. It opened in 1916 and has been expanded three times most recentlyin 1989. Located in the heart of town, the Brooks Museum is a dynamic cultural complex. It includes twenty-nine galleries, art classrooms, a print study room with over forty-five hundred works of art on paper, a research library with over five thousand volumes and an auditorium.

Code:

Removed an inappropriate comma towards the end of the sentence.  You don't need commas before "and"

The facilities also include the Museum Store, the Holly Court Garden and a grand terrace that overlooks the greens and trees of the Memphis? Overton Park.

Code:

Removed an inappropriate comma towards the end of the sentence.  You don't need commas before "and"

The National Ornamental Metal Museum is the only museum in the U.S. that is dedicated to preserving of the art and craftsmanship of metal-working.

Code:

Removed an inappropriate "the"

Exhibitions range from jewelry and hollowware in precious metals to architectural wrought iron. Its collection includes 19th century iron furniture, fences, kitchen utensils, a New Orleans-style cornstalk cast-iron fence, and a diorama complete with Victorian blacksmith?s tools.

Code:

Possessive form of it has no appostraphe; ie, "its" and not "it's"

Overlooking the Mississippi River is a working blacksmith shop. Also featured is an outdoor sculpture garden ? all right on the Mississippi River bluffs.

The beauty of nature abounds in the middle of the city! This can be especially appreciated when you take a visit to the Memphis Botanic Garden located in the Audubon Park. Eighty-eight acres of carefully tended parkland features trees, shrubs, flowers, and working trails, as well as a scenic Japanese Garden surrounding a peaceful lake. The Rose Garden alone features more than four thousand plants. Special springtime treats include the azalea and dogwood trails, while the perennial and herb collections are also seasonal favorites.

The W.C. Handy House Museum was once the home to William Christopher Handy, the man often referred to as the father of the blues.

Code:

Combined the two proceeding sentences.

At this site, located on Beale Street, Handy composed ?Memphis Blues? and ?St. Louis Blues?, among others. Handy lived in this house during his Memphis years, though it was [b]originally[b] located elsewhere in the city. The building was later moved to its present location. The house is filled with photographs, memorabilia and some of the original sheet music written by the man who popularized blues.

Beale Street is still the musical heart of Memphis. It is the best place for fans to hear live music, with famous bars such as B.B. King?s Blues Club. Beale Street has been playing the blues for more than half a century. Historically the centre for black music and culture in the city, it is worth visiting just for its atmosphere alone, let alone the wonderful music. It is rightfully known as the birthplace of the blues.

The more one gets to know about Memphis, the more there is to it. Everyone knows about FedEx and Graceland, while the Civil Rights Museum as a tribute to Martin Luther King is world renowned. However, the local treasures of the less well-known museums, barbecue, sports teams, and historical dwellings make Memphis a great place to live or visit.

<<<<<<<<<<<END>>>>>>>>>>>>

These are all simply suggestions.

Feel free to ignore them if you so wish.

Mr Mephisto

Mephisto2 · 09-15-2003, 11:20 PM

This version is probably easier to read.

Hope this helps or at least gives you some ideas.

*START*START*START*START*START*START*START*START*START*START

When planning a trip to Memphis, keep in mind that the city has a lot to offer. Currently Memphis has become a fast growing community. It contains many diverse individuals from all types of backgrounds. People should visit the city in order to get the full effect of what it has to offer.

Many of the best kept secrets of Memphis involve entertainment, tourism, sports, museums. Additionally, there have been several different celebrities that originated from the Memphis area such as B.B. King, W.C. Handy, Jerry Lee Lewis, Cybill Shepard and of course its most famous son, Elvis Presley. Memphis offers many different types of entertainment for the whole family to enjoy. It boasts two professional sports teams, world famous barbecue restaurants, several museums, botanical gardens, tours of lovely old Victorian houses and Beale Street. In addition, do not forget as a backdrop for all these wonderful activities, you have the "father of all waters" - the mighty Mississippi River.

In 2001, newspaper headlines read "Memphis Goes To The Hoop And Scores". That heralded the arrival of the Grizzlies to Memphis. Our own major-league basketball team had finally come to town! Mid-southerners were happy to have an NBA team right in their own backyard. The Grizzlies games are presently being played in the Pyramid; while a new arena to be known as the FedEx Forum is being constructed. Previously, the corner of Third and Union, downtown Memphis, was littered with adult bookstores, warehouses, and parking lots. Today it is one of the city?s sports icons ? Auto Zone Park. The park is the home of the St. Louis Cardinals' farm team - the Memphis Red Birds. The Red Birds celebrated six years of Triple-A baseball in Memphis in 2003.

For barbecue there is no better place than Memphis?s Rendezvous or Corkey's restaurants. People, including many celebrities, come from all over the world to eat in these famous eateries. Both restaurants have become so famous for their pork and sauce that you can order it on-line or by phone. You can also have the food sent to you via FedEx anywhere in the world! During ?Memphis in May?, one of the events is a "barbecueholic's" dream! For three days there is a barbecue cook-off contest and for the price of admission you can make a "pig" of yourself and eat all you can stomach.

Southern belles sipping mint Juleps on plantation porches immediately come to mind when we think of southern homes. Victorian homes are not usually associated with the mid-south, but Memphis has eighteen of them. Located in downtown Memphis, they make up some twenty-five blocks and range from Neoclassical to Gothic Revival in style. These houses have been restored to their former glory, and now look as they didd back in the days when "cotton was king". Most are privately owned, but the Mallory-Neely House and the Woodruff-Fontaine Hose are open to the public.

In addition to the better-known tourist destinations in Memphis, such as Elvis Presley's Graceland and the Civil Rights Museum, there are also many lesser-known museums. These include the Brooks Art Museum, the W.C. Handy Museum, and the National Ornamental Metal Museum. The Brooks Museum is the oldest fine arts museum in the state of Tennessee. It opened in 1916 and has been expanded three times most recentlyin 1989. Located in the heart of town, the Brooks Museum is a dynamic cultural complex. It includes twenty-nine galleries, art classrooms, a print study room with over forty-five hundred works of art on paper, a research library with over five thousand volumes and an auditorium. The facilities also include the Museum Store, the Holly Court Garden and a grand terrace that overlooks the greens and trees of the Memphis' Overton Park.

The National Ornamental Metal Museum is the only museum in the U.S. that is dedicated to preserving of the art and craftsmanship of metal-working. Exhibitions range from jewelry and hollowware in precious metals to architectural wrought iron. Its collection includes 19th century iron furniture, fences, kitchen utensils, a New Orleans-style cornstalk cast-iron fence, and a diorama complete with Victorian blacksmith's tools. Overlooking the Mississippi River is a working blacksmith shop. Also featured is an outdoor sculpture garden - all right on the Mississippi River bluffs.

The beauty of nature abounds in the middle of the city! This can be especially appreciated when you take a visit to the Memphis Botanic Garden located in the Audubon Park. Eighty-eight acres of carefully tended parkland features trees, shrubs, flowers, and working trails, as well as a scenic Japanese Garden surrounding a peaceful lake. The Rose Garden alone features more than four thousand plants. Special springtime treats include the azalea and dogwood trails, while the perennial and herb collections are also seasonal favorites.

The W.C. Handy House Museum was once the home to William Christopher Handy, the man often referred to as the father of the blues. At this site, located on Beale Street, Handy composed "Memphis Blues" and "St. Louis Blues", among others. Handy lived in this house during his Memphis years, though it was [b]originally[b] located elsewhere in the city. The building was later moved to its present location. The house is filled with photographs, memorabilia and some of the original sheet music written by the man who popularized blues.

Beale Street is still the musical heart of Memphis. It is the best place for fans to hear live music, with famous bars such as B.B. King?s Blues Club. Beale Street has been playing the blues for more than half a century. Historically the centre for black music and culture in the city, it is worth visiting just for its atmosphere alone, let alone the wonderful music. It is rightfully known as the birthplace of the blues.

The more one gets to know about Memphis, the more there is to it. Everyone knows about FedEx and Graceland, while the Civil Rights Museum as a tribute to Martin Luther King is world renowned. However, the local treasures of the less well-known museums, barbecue, sports teams, and historical dwellings make Memphis a great place to live or visit.

*END*END*END*END*END*END*END*END

Tirian · 09-16-2003, 07:24 AM

Mr Mephisto

Just a thought on the "two spaces after the period" comment. I know that this is correct for typing a document on a typewriter, but I am under the impression that modern word processors add an appropriate amount of space after a period now. Perhaps the writer should use or not use this extra space depending on the technology being used to typeset.

Of course when I try and confirm this I cannot find the place to view or change the setting in MS Word. - just a thought.

Lasereth · 09-16-2003, 11:57 AM

I've always been taught that even when using Microsoft Word that you're supposed to put 2 spaces after each sentence end. Hell, my english teachers last year at Appalachian State University counted off if you didn't have 2 spaces. I can't even type now without putting two at the end of each sentence.

-Lasereth

Mephisto2 · 09-16-2003, 01:18 PM

Two spaces after each period is still standard.

"Proportional spacing" fonts do not change this basic rule. Open a book and check the fonts and spacing. 99% of all books use proportional spacing fonts but still comply to this rule.

Mr Mephisto

torgone · 09-17-2003, 06:19 PM

3rd paragraph: "...there IS no better place than Memphis's Rendezvous OR Corky's restaurants." Might be better "...there are no better places than Memphis's Rendezvous and Corky's restaurants." Seems a little more correct to me.

Fremen · 09-17-2003, 07:54 PM

This sentence seems wrong somehow.

Quote:

Originally posted by Metallica_Band
Currently Memphis has become a fast growing community.

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meff Vanishing, like I do.. Location: Austin, TX	I thought there's a bunch of programs that do grammer/spelling checking? Getting people to read your stuff to proofread it is kinda, uhm.. I dunno. You get the point? __________________ Toy-like people make me boy-like.

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Fremen With a mustache, the cool factor would be too much Location: left side of my couch, East Texas	I'll help you out on one thing. Sybil Shepard should be spelled Cybill Shepherd. __________________ Google

09-15-2003, 11:07 PM	#6 (permalink)
Mephisto2 Junkie	OK, there's a bunch of errors in there. I'm not criticising you, but simply stating a fact. For starters, there are TWO spaces after a period. You won't be able to see that clearly in the corrected version below. STARTSTARTSTARTSTARTSTART When planning a trip to Memphis, keep in mind that the city has a lot to offer. Currently Memphis has become a fast growing community. It contains many diverse individuals from all types of backgrounds. People would have to visit the city in order to get the full effect of what it has to offer. Code: The preceding sentence has a conditional clause that seems inappropriate. Replace would have to with need to or should visit. Many of the best kept secrets of Memphis involve entertainment, tourism, sports, museums Code: Full stop here. Additionally, there have been several different celebrities that originated from the Memphis area such as B.B. King, W.C. Handy, Jerry Lee Lewis, Sybil Shepard and of course its most famous son, Elvis Presley. Memphis offers many different types of entertainment for the whole family to enjoy. It boasts two professional sports teams, world famous barbecue restaurants, several museums, botanical gardens, tours of lovely old Victorian houses and Beale Street. Code: Replaced "diverse" with "many" and removed an inappropriate comma towards the end of the sentence In addition, do not forget as a backdrop for all these wonderful activities, you have the ?father of all waters? ? the mighty Mississippi River. In 2001, newspaper headlines read ?Memphis Goes To The Hoop And Scores?. That heralded the arrival of the Grizzlies to Memphis. Our own major-league basketball team had finally come to town! Mid-southerners were happy to have an NBA team right in their own backyard. The Grizzlies games are presently being played in the Pyramid; while a new arena to be known as the FedEx Forum is being constructed. Previously, the corner of Third and Union, downtown Memphis, was littered with adult bookstores, warehouses, and parking lots. Today it is one of the city?s sports icons ? Auto Zone Park. The park is the home of the St. Louis Cardinals? farm team ? the Memphis Red Birds. The Red Birds celebrated six years of Triple-A baseball in Memphis in 2003. For barbecue there is no better place than Memphis?s Rendezvous or Corkey?s restaurants. Code: Removed an inappropriate comma. People, including many celebrities, come from all over the world to eat in these famous eateries. Code: Celebrities are automatically people, so the the sentence above sounded unusual, hence my suggested change Both restaurants have become so famous for their pork and sauce that you can order it on-line or by phone. You can also have the food sent to you via FedEx anywhere in the world! During ?Memphis in May?, one of the events is a ?barbecueholic?s? dream! For three days there is a barbecue cook-off contest and for the price of admission you can make a ?pig? of yourself and eat all you can stomach. Code: Removed an inappropriate comma. Revised wording slightly. Southern belles sipping mint Juleps on plantation porches immediately come to mind when we think of southern homes. Victorian homes are not usually associated with the mid-south, but Memphis has eighteen of them. Code: In this context, shouldn't "mid-south" be considered a proper noun? IE, "mid-South". Not certain of this as I am not American. Located in downtown Memphis, they make up some twenty-five blocks and range from Neoclassical to Gothic Revival in style. These houses have been restored to their former glory, back in the days when ?cotton was king?. Most are privately owned, but the Mallory-Neely House and the Woodruff-Fontaine Hose are open to the public. In addition to the better-known tourist destinations in Memphis, such as Elvis Presley?s Graceland and the Civil Rights Museum, there are also many lesser-known museums. These include the Brooks Art Museum, the W.C. Handy Museum, and the National Ornamental Metal Museum. The Brooks Museum is the oldest fine arts museum in the state of Tennessee. It opened in 1916 and has been expanded three times most recentlyin 1989. Located in the heart of town, the Brooks Museum is a dynamic cultural complex. It includes twenty-nine galleries, art classrooms, a print study room with over forty-five hundred works of art on paper, a research library with over five thousand volumes and an auditorium. Code: Removed an inappropriate comma towards the end of the sentence. You don't need commas before "and" The facilities also include the Museum Store, the Holly Court Garden and a grand terrace that overlooks the greens and trees of the Memphis? Overton Park. Code: Removed an inappropriate comma towards the end of the sentence. You don't need commas before "and" The National Ornamental Metal Museum is the only museum in the U.S. that is dedicated to preserving of the art and craftsmanship of metal-working. Code: Removed an inappropriate "the" Exhibitions range from jewelry and hollowware in precious metals to architectural wrought iron. Its collection includes 19th century iron furniture, fences, kitchen utensils, a New Orleans-style cornstalk cast-iron fence, and a diorama complete with Victorian blacksmith?s tools. Code: Possessive form of it has no appostraphe; ie, "its" and not "it's" Overlooking the Mississippi River is a working blacksmith shop. Also featured is an outdoor sculpture garden ? all right on the Mississippi River bluffs. The beauty of nature abounds in the middle of the city! This can be especially appreciated when you take a visit to the Memphis Botanic Garden located in the Audubon Park. Eighty-eight acres of carefully tended parkland features trees, shrubs, flowers, and working trails, as well as a scenic Japanese Garden surrounding a peaceful lake. The Rose Garden alone features more than four thousand plants. Special springtime treats include the azalea and dogwood trails, while the perennial and herb collections are also seasonal favorites. The W.C. Handy House Museum was once the home to William Christopher Handy, the man often referred to as the father of the blues. Code: Combined the two proceeding sentences. At this site, located on Beale Street, Handy composed ?Memphis Blues? and ?St. Louis Blues?, among others. Handy lived in this house during his Memphis years, though it was [b]originally[b] located elsewhere in the city. The building was later moved to its present location. The house is filled with photographs, memorabilia and some of the original sheet music written by the man who popularized blues. Beale Street is still the musical heart of Memphis. It is the best place for fans to hear live music, with famous bars such as B.B. King?s Blues Club. Beale Street has been playing the blues for more than half a century. Historically the centre for black music and culture in the city, it is worth visiting just for its atmosphere alone, let alone the wonderful music. It is rightfully known as the birthplace of the blues. The more one gets to know about Memphis, the more there is to it. Everyone knows about FedEx and Graceland, while the Civil Rights Museum as a tribute to Martin Luther King is world renowned. However, the local treasures of the less well-known museums, barbecue, sports teams, and historical dwellings make Memphis a great place to live or visit. <<<<<<<<<<<END>>>>>>>>>>>> These are all simply suggestions. Feel free to ignore them if you so wish. Mr Mephisto Last edited by Mephisto2; 09-15-2003 at 11:09 PM..

09-15-2003, 11:20 PM	#7 (permalink)
Mephisto2 Junkie	This version is probably easier to read. Hope this helps or at least gives you some ideas. STARTSTARTSTARTSTARTSTARTSTARTSTARTSTARTSTARTSTART When planning a trip to Memphis, keep in mind that the city has a lot to offer. Currently Memphis has become a fast growing community. It contains many diverse individuals from all types of backgrounds. People should visit the city in order to get the full effect of what it has to offer. Many of the best kept secrets of Memphis involve entertainment, tourism, sports, museums. Additionally, there have been several different celebrities that originated from the Memphis area such as B.B. King, W.C. Handy, Jerry Lee Lewis, Cybill Shepard and of course its most famous son, Elvis Presley. Memphis offers many different types of entertainment for the whole family to enjoy. It boasts two professional sports teams, world famous barbecue restaurants, several museums, botanical gardens, tours of lovely old Victorian houses and Beale Street. In addition, do not forget as a backdrop for all these wonderful activities, you have the "father of all waters" - the mighty Mississippi River. In 2001, newspaper headlines read "Memphis Goes To The Hoop And Scores". That heralded the arrival of the Grizzlies to Memphis. Our own major-league basketball team had finally come to town! Mid-southerners were happy to have an NBA team right in their own backyard. The Grizzlies games are presently being played in the Pyramid; while a new arena to be known as the FedEx Forum is being constructed. Previously, the corner of Third and Union, downtown Memphis, was littered with adult bookstores, warehouses, and parking lots. Today it is one of the city?s sports icons ? Auto Zone Park. The park is the home of the St. Louis Cardinals' farm team - the Memphis Red Birds. The Red Birds celebrated six years of Triple-A baseball in Memphis in 2003. For barbecue there is no better place than Memphis?s Rendezvous or Corkey's restaurants. People, including many celebrities, come from all over the world to eat in these famous eateries. Both restaurants have become so famous for their pork and sauce that you can order it on-line or by phone. You can also have the food sent to you via FedEx anywhere in the world! During ?Memphis in May?, one of the events is a "barbecueholic's" dream! For three days there is a barbecue cook-off contest and for the price of admission you can make a "pig" of yourself and eat all you can stomach. Southern belles sipping mint Juleps on plantation porches immediately come to mind when we think of southern homes. Victorian homes are not usually associated with the mid-south, but Memphis has eighteen of them. Located in downtown Memphis, they make up some twenty-five blocks and range from Neoclassical to Gothic Revival in style. These houses have been restored to their former glory, and now look as they didd back in the days when "cotton was king". Most are privately owned, but the Mallory-Neely House and the Woodruff-Fontaine Hose are open to the public. In addition to the better-known tourist destinations in Memphis, such as Elvis Presley's Graceland and the Civil Rights Museum, there are also many lesser-known museums. These include the Brooks Art Museum, the W.C. Handy Museum, and the National Ornamental Metal Museum. The Brooks Museum is the oldest fine arts museum in the state of Tennessee. It opened in 1916 and has been expanded three times most recentlyin 1989. Located in the heart of town, the Brooks Museum is a dynamic cultural complex. It includes twenty-nine galleries, art classrooms, a print study room with over forty-five hundred works of art on paper, a research library with over five thousand volumes and an auditorium. The facilities also include the Museum Store, the Holly Court Garden and a grand terrace that overlooks the greens and trees of the Memphis' Overton Park. The National Ornamental Metal Museum is the only museum in the U.S. that is dedicated to preserving of the art and craftsmanship of metal-working. Exhibitions range from jewelry and hollowware in precious metals to architectural wrought iron. Its collection includes 19th century iron furniture, fences, kitchen utensils, a New Orleans-style cornstalk cast-iron fence, and a diorama complete with Victorian blacksmith's tools. Overlooking the Mississippi River is a working blacksmith shop. Also featured is an outdoor sculpture garden - all right on the Mississippi River bluffs. The beauty of nature abounds in the middle of the city! This can be especially appreciated when you take a visit to the Memphis Botanic Garden located in the Audubon Park. Eighty-eight acres of carefully tended parkland features trees, shrubs, flowers, and working trails, as well as a scenic Japanese Garden surrounding a peaceful lake. The Rose Garden alone features more than four thousand plants. Special springtime treats include the azalea and dogwood trails, while the perennial and herb collections are also seasonal favorites. The W.C. Handy House Museum was once the home to William Christopher Handy, the man often referred to as the father of the blues. At this site, located on Beale Street, Handy composed "Memphis Blues" and "St. Louis Blues", among others. Handy lived in this house during his Memphis years, though it was [b]originally[b] located elsewhere in the city. The building was later moved to its present location. The house is filled with photographs, memorabilia and some of the original sheet music written by the man who popularized blues. Beale Street is still the musical heart of Memphis. It is the best place for fans to hear live music, with famous bars such as B.B. King?s Blues Club. Beale Street has been playing the blues for more than half a century. Historically the centre for black music and culture in the city, it is worth visiting just for its atmosphere alone, let alone the wonderful music. It is rightfully known as the birthplace of the blues. The more one gets to know about Memphis, the more there is to it. Everyone knows about FedEx and Graceland, while the Civil Rights Museum as a tribute to Martin Luther King is world renowned. However, the local treasures of the less well-known museums, barbecue, sports teams, and historical dwellings make Memphis a great place to live or visit. ENDENDENDENDENDENDENDEND Last edited by Mephisto2; 09-15-2003 at 11:32 PM..

09-16-2003, 11:57 AM	#9 (permalink)
Lasereth Knight of the Old Republic Location: Winston-Salem, NC	I've always been taught that even when using Microsoft Word that you're supposed to put 2 spaces after each sentence end. Hell, my english teachers last year at Appalachian State University counted off if you didn't have 2 spaces. I can't even type now without putting two at the end of each sentence. -Lasereth __________________ "A Darwinian attacks his theory, seeking to find flaws. An ID believer defends his theory, seeking to conceal flaws." -Roger Ebert

09-15-2003, 01:20 PM	#5 (permalink)
Tirian Addict Location: Canada	From the last paragraph ... "The more one gets to know about Memphis, the more there is to them." ...the more there is to who ?? this may be an unidentified pronoun. I hope that helps.

09-16-2003, 07:24 AM	#8 (permalink)
Tirian Addict Location: Canada	Mr Mephisto Just a thought on the "two spaces after the period" comment. I know that this is correct for typing a document on a typewriter, but I am under the impression that modern word processors add an appropriate amount of space after a period now. Perhaps the writer should use or not use this extra space depending on the technology being used to typeset. Of course when I try and confirm this I cannot find the place to view or change the setting in MS Word. - just a thought.

09-16-2003, 01:18 PM	#10 (permalink)
Mephisto2 Junkie	Two spaces after each period is still standard. "Proportional spacing" fonts do not change this basic rule. Open a book and check the fonts and spacing. 99% of all books use proportional spacing fonts but still comply to this rule. Mr Mephisto

09-17-2003, 06:19 PM	#11 (permalink)
torgone What's beyond psycho? Location: Still out there	3rd paragraph: "...there IS no better place than Memphis's Rendezvous OR Corky's restaurants." Might be better "...there are no better places than Memphis's Rendezvous and Corky's restaurants." Seems a little more correct to me. __________________ "Outside of a dog, a book is man's best friend. Inside of a dog it's too dark to read." Groucho Marx